sundown

August 8 NaHaiWriMo- the prompt is “spider”, provided by Sheila Windsor. My haiku:

ORIGINAL VERSION:

sundown
imagining a spider
in every shadow

VERSION II: (proposed by Susan Murata)

sundown
a spider
in every shadow

VERSION III: (proposed by Freddy Ben-Arroyo)

sundown
in every shadow
a spider

VERSION IV: (rewrite, by me)
sundown
a spider lurks
in every shadow

 

Very curious which of the four versions works for people.